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[Zarggg]

"hone are safe?" What?

[Seraphim]

[Zarggg]

Nah, it's just that I find amusement in just about everything.

[SideWaysThinker]

Slender Man.avi (Minecraft Nonsense)

[huskyman]

SHE TURNED AROUND AND GAVE THAT BIG BOOTY A SLAP

[BranRainey]

Not sure if this is supposed to be funny or scary, but it's neither. The basic idea could be cool (for a Minecraft video) but the distortion is so half-assed that it ruins everything.

[SideWaysThinker]

[Seraphim]

Yeah, the distortion could use a lot of work but the concept certainly is interesting.

[redherring]

[SideWaysThinker]

[Riovas]

good concept, poor execution I would have to say. The distortion became very annoying very quickly, and definitely need to add some sort of audio besides KSHHHHKSHHHHHKSHHHH. With a little polishing this should turn out rather nicely

[BranRainey]

Not sure how criticizing your video for having bad distortion is supposed to be snobby. The distortion is one of the key things that makes the slender man what he is, and all you did was crossfade into the same clip of white noise over and over to hide your cuts. That's straight-up lazy. I get that it's just a quick video you threw together, but I'm not going to pretend just because of that excuse.

Want actual criticism? Okay. Aside from the Apple Bottom Jeans thing taking away from the scariness (I'll assume you did that intentionally), the lack of sound design is the main problem. If you have footsteps or dripping water or anything else for ambience, the location in the video will seem "silent" and have at least some amount of atmosphere to it. With the audio being muted entirely, the viewer gets the impression that you just don't know how to record audio with your computer (similar to people who have "Unregistered HyperCam 2" in the corner of their videos).

Your set is as well-designed as it could be given the limitations -- I especially like the long, narrow hallways -- but I would've liked to see it change more as you progressed through it. One idea I just came up with: create a bunch of dirt tunnels just one block below the set, then plant someone down there to aim up and destroy a block of the floor as you walk over it. That way it's like a floorboard broke or something and you can drop into some other, creepier area of the set. (With sound design, you could use amplitude modulation to rip off that effect that Marble Hornets always uses right as you enter the new area. Or you could be creative and figure out another type of distortion; that's up to you.)

That one shot of Slender Man from above looks dreadful, because it draws attention to his giant Lego-block head. It sucks that you can't get a character model that's actually slender, but you need to be careful to frame your shots so it looks semi-decent. Most shots look about as good as they could be, though, so good job on that for the most part.

Hopefully this is more constructive.

[SideWaysThinker]

[BranRainey]

I think it would also look a bit more polished if you added that "zoom bar" thing that cheap camcorders have. When you zoom in or out, a little bar appears at the bottom that goes from W (wide) to T (tight) and indicates how zoomed in the camera is. Not necessary, but it would add polish.

Actually, now that I think about it, adding some digital shake to the footage would also make it seem much more polished and less like video game footage. Has to be reasonable, though.

[Dray]

Don't forget that Minecraft has its own sweet sound effects! The 'unexplored cave' one could be used once or twice. The footsteps always sound lonely in that game, to me.

Less lighting at certain parts would be good, too. Seeing his silhouette with only lights behind would help!