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[Cosmogyral]

 Critics wanted for Slenderblog concept

[awakeasaurusrex]

The problem with this idea would be coming up with a way for the protagonist to seem threatened by Slender Man. I mean, if he can't see her then no matter how crazy things get that's a source for comfort. Can't really scare people if you don't make them believe you are in danger.

[fullroundaction]

If he can't see her then how would you put her in constant conflict with him?

Most of the stories are about being stalked but that's not possible here so you might be able to pull off something semi original.

[Compulsory Basket]

You've got me interested. I know some people are wary of characters who can resist Slenderman or who have powers of their own, but I think at this point we're reaching critical mass with characters who are ordinary people getting their asses terminally kicked. I'd be interested to read about a character who could interact with Slendy in a different way.

And if he can't perceive her, that'd give her a pretty unique perspective. She could encounter him close-up without getting murdered, for one thing. You'd be able to explore encounters which would be closed to you with a character who has to run away (or who Slendy vanishes away from).

She could probably do both of your ideas, to be honest. Try and help people using her ability, and at the same time try to work out why she has it, and also get used to having it, since I think I'd run away from a horrible monster the first few times even if I knew it couldn't see me. XD

Some things off the top of my head I think I'd be wary of would be (a) leaving the question "why her" unanswered, and (b) making the character too powerful/invulnerable/saintly (maybe, even though he can't perceive her, his presence has side-effects on her?). But as I said, definitely interested.

[Ol'Slendy]

Make it so she can turn her "invisibility" on and off. That way she'll have a resason to be scared, adn want to kill slendy.

But don't kill him.

[Compulsory Basket]

[Lewa]

I think people close to her should be His victims. She needs to stop him from getting them. That would create the tension, I think, especially if she fails miserably early on.

[awakeasaurusrex]

Oooh, how about this? He can't see her so long as she doesn't intervene in what he's doing. So she's left with having to choose whether to stand and watch as he does something awful, or getting involved to save whoever he's stalking, but putting herself in danger by doing so.

[Compulsory Basket]

[Demongel]

Re: Critics wanted for Slenderblog concept

[KamenZero]

And/or she cannot be seen so long as she is with someone else, which puts the other person in danger too. mm. something.

[Cosmogyral]

Wow! Thanks for all the feedback, I had no idea I'd get so much of a response!

awakeasaurusrex: I figured I'd play around with Survivor's Guilt. You know, maybe everyone she knows is slowly being stalked and killed by Slenderman (like Lewa suggested), but she can't figure out how to help them. I really like the idea of having to choose between intervening (and possibly still failing to help) or watching others suffer unspeakable horrors.

Compulsory Basket: You have a good point, the first few times she'd probably have a nervous breakdown or something before probably even realizing she can't be 'seen'. I most definitely want to avoid creating a 'Mary Sue', in that vein I was thinking of finding someone to sort of beta for me, if I go through with it, so that I'd have another perspective to keep a watch out for signs of that. I also figured that even though Slenderman couldn't see her, he'd still affect her. Y'know, paranoia, maybe something like Slendy-sickness, or even being Touched or Moved by accident while getting in between him and a victim. If I wanted to go the way of having Slenderproxies, perhaps having them see her, and having a big threat from that.

Demongel: I don't think she could be considered immune to Slenderman, maybe have something of an advantage, but as you mentioned, she'd still be affected by his proximity. I like your theory on how the ability could work, and although I won't mention the hows or whys of it (to save the surprise if I do start this), I would like to approach it from an angle like this, something more psychological than supernatural.

KamenZero: As much as I love the emotional dilemma of this idea, I think it would be interesting to have some scenes where it's just her and Slendy, dealing with her fear and such.

Thank you again!

[Demongel]

Just keep in mind that, at the end of the day, Slender Man is a supernatural entity and, as such, allows for supernatural shenanigans. I wouldn't push the boundaries beyond what you'd see in an H.P. Lovecraft work though.

[Chukwa]

The only way I could see this working is if the blog were told through Slendy's POV... which woud be interesting. But I'm sure you could come up with something.

[Demongel]

This just popped into my head.

"I keep seeing Him everywhere. Always there, always watching...but not me. Dear God, why not me?! My parents, my brother, my best friend, all dead because he wasn't watching ME! I've tried everything to make Him see me, to know I'm there, but be never does. Yet He's always there, always watching everyone around me. I can't do this anymore. I can't keep letting innocent people get hurt because of me. I have to make Him see me. I have to make Him know I'm there. It's the only way.

God forgive me..."