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Josh Rallus · Veteran Joined: 25 Oct 2010 Posts: 119

The Angel's Game

MetalGearSamus · Unfettered Joined: 03 Apr 2010 Posts: 675

Huh, despite your posting this directly, this is pretty damn good. Although the effects are rather limited (so far), you've made up for it with (mostly) convincing acting and story.

**Posted:** Sat Nov 13, 2010 2:45 am

Hombre Delgadas

You had me at TINY PIRATE HAT!!!

**Posted:** Sat Nov 13, 2010 3:12 am

5_pak · Veteran Joined: 25 Oct 2010 Posts: 110

Yeah, I think it's considered bad form to be "in-game" on the forums here. Sort of like betraying the "honor among thieves" thing. But whatev.

I don't know. Can't really get into it. Seems to have potential but so far is unbelievable. Overacting I think is the main thing. "Oh no! A golf tea bag!" "Oh no! A dice pouch!" "Oh no! A video!" Lot of sighing and awkward pausing and (I know it's an attempt at realism) boring dialogue. Realism is never an excuse for boredom.

I think it has potential but right now it's kinda dragging and the tension is forced rather than crafted. I'll keep an eye on it.

**Posted:** Sat Nov 13, 2010 3:29 am

AxMxK · Unfettered Joined: 25 Oct 2009 Posts: 327

I want to say that the "Angel" in this case is the "Angel of Death?"

**Posted:** Sat Nov 13, 2010 6:56 am

JustaGuest · Veteran Joined: 28 Aug 2010 Posts: 145

Someone better call Zeke Stratham then, because he is the one chasing it.

**Posted:** Sat Nov 13, 2010 11:43 am

Josh Rallus · Veteran Joined: 25 Oct 2010 Posts: 119

5_pak · Veteran Joined: 25 Oct 2010 Posts: 110

Good luck to you. One thing to think about is, since this is a Slenderblog and early on will appear like a lot of others, the main thing you want to focus on to distinguish yourself is this: you'll obviously start the story off with a lot of similarities to other Slender-stories. The key to being different is to think of what the "typical" or possibly even "logical" response to those initial set-ups would be, and then not do them. Your audience knows the Slender-stories inside and out, so they can guess all of the obvious response to initial Slender-action. The key is to surprise them, not in sudden violent bursts of static, but in character action that, while still believable, was not what they saw coming.

There, you have my vague, Yoda-like input. Now go forth and conquer new worlds!

MetalGearSamus · Unfettered Joined: 03 Apr 2010 Posts: 675

**Posted:** Sat Nov 13, 2010 4:00 pm

SolDL · Unfettered Joined: 21 Oct 2010 Posts: 545

I'd say we should provide some guidelines to people who are just starting out, to get them some exposure, but if we do that, well, we still won't be surprised by the series' introduction >_>

**Posted:** Sat Nov 13, 2010 5:59 pm

Das Omega · Unfettered Joined: 07 Oct 2010 Posts: 345

You had me at pierce the heavens.

**Posted:** Sun Nov 14, 2010 9:50 am

MetalGearSamus · Unfettered Joined: 03 Apr 2010 Posts: 675

Oh, and in case nobody caught it, his friend has a channel and they just posted a new video:

http://www.youtube.com/user/UnwillingWatcher

**Posted:** Sun Nov 14, 2010 5:29 pm

Mad Hatter · Guest

**Posted:** Sun Nov 14, 2010 7:54 pm

5_pak · Veteran Joined: 25 Oct 2010 Posts: 110

Austin takes hearing voices... rather well. I would be seeking psychological evaluation at this point if I had just certifiably proved that I was hearing disembodied voices.

Yeah. New vid is a few more cliches. Shadows, voices, and the "what is that" cut.

**Posted:** Sun Nov 14, 2010 8:39 pm

Das Omega · Unfettered Joined: 07 Oct 2010 Posts: 345

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UP7IR25OcrI

This is the greatest response I've ever seen someone have to getting cryptic messages.

**Posted:** Mon Nov 15, 2010 11:11 am