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fredsolo · Boot Joined: 17 Feb 2011 Posts: 67 Location: Filmland

I made a movie

JustJim · Unfettered Joined: 19 Jan 2011 Posts: 661

Nice job sir! You do a tremendous job of creating atmosphere and dramatic tension, and the contrast of visual style between the dreams and the main segments really makes it stand out. The acting was well done, too, and the character did a tremendous job of walking that creepy line, especially as it progresses.

I'd say you have all the skills to make a terrific Slendy vlog. This one was so creepy, especially the whole ending scene. I almost fear seeing what you could do with something as terrifying as the Slender Man.

**Posted:** Sun May 08, 2011 1:51 am

Punk V · Veteran Joined: 29 Nov 2010 Posts: 118

Honestly I loved this. I thought the concept and execution were amazing. I believe you have the editing, effects, and experience that are necessary, but the most important parts of a slender vlog are the characters and the story. You need to make sure you have the actors and have things planned out before you shoot. Make sure to script as much as you can but improvisation is an amazing tool in the right hands.

**Posted:** Sun May 08, 2011 1:53 am

Nimbus

Hey, TribeTwelve creator here.

I very much liked this, it was quite brilliant actually. I loved the way you developed the story and how you left the ending an ambiguous cliffhanger, even though there was somewhat of a closure. There was nice tension and your acting was very well executed. If you made a vlog around this, Slender Man related or not, I wouldn't mind subscribing; this concept has great potential.

Also, you've got some rockin' facial hair and sort of sound like Robert Downey Jr. Cool

**Posted:** Sun May 08, 2011 2:52 am

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VoidCaste · Decorated Joined: 22 Feb 2011 Posts: 251

Extremely well put together, I enjoyed the entire video. If you have an idea for a slender-type vlog then by all means, please make Smile

Good luck!

**Posted:** Sun May 08, 2011 3:16 am

MsSynclair · Entrenched Joined: 06 Feb 2011 Posts: 823

Love it. I think you could make a good Slendervlog. But whether you make something Slenderman related or something entirely new or different, I'm subbing.

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I logged in just so I could tell you how absolutely brilliant that was.

And I agree with Nimbus, you totally reminded me of Robert Downey Jr. .

I also agree with him about subscribing whether you made a Slendy vlog or not. That was fantastic.

**Posted:** Sun May 08, 2011 9:15 am

Crisssy101 · Boot Joined: 31 Mar 2011 Posts: 28

Wow this was great for many reasons, one of them being the E-Z Grabber. LOL Surprisingly, it made the robot more human. Once you get over your initial snickering, and start to watch him struggle with his poor little makeshift hand and pitiful suction cups, you feel sorry for him. While the drawn out knife scene at the end did scare me a little bit because it was so slow and deliberate... I was still happy the robot got revenge. : )

Great Job. Yes, you would be great doing slendy. No doubt.

**Posted:** Sun May 08, 2011 11:45 am

The Kempest

I wonder what sort of new take you'll have with a Slenderseries. You're definitely creative enough. Very Happy

**Posted:** Sun May 08, 2011 12:36 pm

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Absolutely brilliant.

If you do a vlog -> 100% subscribin'! Cool

**Posted:** Sun May 08, 2011 2:25 pm

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Chukwa · Decorated Joined: 09 Oct 2010 Posts: 170

You know, this sort of reminded me of The Human Centipede.

And I mean that in the nicest way possible.

If you have this solid of writing, and this good of effects, it'd probably be stupid if you didn't make a slenderseries.

**Posted:** Sun May 08, 2011 2:53 pm

Glomple · Veteran Joined: 25 Nov 2010 Posts: 146

That was very entertaining. Good job, I hope you make a Slenderseries. Very Happy

**Posted:** Sun May 08, 2011 2:55 pm

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Man, I hope you do. The EZ Grabber made me chuckle, as I have one too. xD Felt bad for him, having such a meager hand to use. Like Crissy said, pfft.

I'll be honest, that repeating knife scene made me go, "Derp, what." Just because it seemed he stabbed the cyborg before he was the aforementioned, but there was no blood on it... I might just be confused, though, and sorry if I am just derpin'.

But dear god, that was so cool. xD
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**Posted:** Sun May 08, 2011 3:10 pm

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IonCharge · Veteran Joined: 03 Mar 2011 Posts: 131

Enjoyed this a lot, and would insta-subscribe if you made a vlog. You seem to have good skills creating tension and character, to be honest the Robot had more character than what we've seen in some Slendervlogs.

God Speed to the creation of you vLog good sir.

**Posted:** Sun May 08, 2011 4:13 pm

Watson

I would love to see you make a...not-Slenderman thing. This was just too good to aim for such a niche audience, man. You could do something that appealed to a broader scope and it'd be a lot cooler and more original, IMO. Go ahead and make an SM blog if you'd like, I'll be watching whatever you make for a while now. haha

**Posted:** Mon May 09, 2011 12:12 am