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[DuaLocKs]

[DEAD SERIES] DreamsOfRavens

[SignerJ]

It's not the best acting, nor is the character the most reasonable one...

But it seems decently realistic to me, so I'll follow it.

(Also, I was the first viewer! Woohoo!)


EDIT: Well, it would apparently seem that he decided to change the introduction of his series.

[thatslenderdude]

Watched all of the videos and there is 2 issues already.
First, is the operator symbol. no one is original these days.
second, Some videos are just too short. Come on! At least make the videos 1 minute to 4 minutes long.

[Slendermau5]

Ok, constructive criticism time.

1.) Stop Typing Like This. Please. Look At It. It Looks Bad, Right?

2.) Character development. It's good that you're using it, but please, PLEASE use it well. Watch the first few episodes of stanfrederick or something and look at how they develop their characters, how the characters interact with each other, how it all fits into the video and everything. Equally, don't use too much, no-one likes a series which takes 30 videos for anything to actually happen.

3.) Video length. Whilst 20-minute videos of nothing are awful, 20-second videos of nothing are just as bad. 2-5 minutes of SOMETHING ACTUALLY HAPPENING is recommended, or 10-12 minutes max if you can pull it off.

4.) Please, PLEASE don't rage quit this series just to make another one. Please. 4 is enough. Continue with this one and take in constructive criticism from other people, and make this into a decent fucking series, I know you can do it.

I'm not saying this series is particularly bad, I mean, I've definitely seen worse, and it's definitely better than truthseekers, but there is definitely room for improvement. It's ok, all you need is a little practise. You'll get there some day. I wish you the best of luck with this series.

- Slendermau5

(Also, OOG-wise, if you post in your own thread one more time, I will reach through my monitor and punch you in the face. That is all.)

[Tharol]

So is over there now .

[SignerJ]

So... He just deleted two or three more videos?

*Sigh* Fine. Whatever. Just, please, don't delete any more videos. It is annoying, and confuses me since I now compulsively archive all videos of any Slender series that I watch, save one or two. So, please, stop deleting the videos!

[DrStevzious117]

Creator of this series, if you're reading this:

DO NOT DELETE YOUR SHIT BECAUSE SOMEONE DOESN'T LIKE IT.

It's okay for someone to not like it; it happens to every creator. You don't have to go and delete the things that they don't like. Keep them there, improve, anything but get rid of them. It just pisses us off.

Please, please, PLEASE, take these words into consideration.

[DuaLocKs]

He just remade all those videos and he deleted them because he uploaded too fast. He also changed the symbol from the Operator symbol to a Raven Bear-trap symbol or something.

[Slendermau5]

Wow, you're improving. Nice one

The only problem I can think of is that you're overusing the distortion a little bit. Try just having constant distortion when Slendy shows up, and having very short bursts at other times like when you're coughing up blood. While distortion is cool, sometimes it makes it difficult to see what's happening and becomes annoying after a while.

Other than that, great job. Keep it up.

[DrStevzious117]

This is a step in the right direction; I'm liking this.

[Peppercorn]

This series still needs more story (and preferably less distortion) but it's improved a lot. I'll keep watching.

[DuaLocKs]

New video:

[DuaLocKs]

new video:

[MichaelisHere]

so ya... sorry for posting on my own trailhead,
but james(my brother thought i messed up my series and deleted all my video's so someone please restart this trailhead.

P.S the restart: on the same channel at noon tomorrow

[ChildOfAtom]

No. Screwing up your series doesn't mean you get a new thread.

Also: DO NOT POST HERE AGAIN.