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[DarkDragon]

[TRAILHEAD] ComputerGuide

[The Totem]

Reminds me a lot of the horrible 1st draft of PhantomVoices. It has a lot of potential, but I still don't see anything groundbreaking yet.

[DarkDragon]

Apparently he's got a mythos page to so he definitely put a lot of thought into the series. I think it's going to improve over time. Here's the link to that mythos page. Looks interesting and he's got some other series on there crossing over with him.

http://thefearmythos.wikia.com/wiki/The_Lock_Mythos/Verse

[The Totem]

He's put a lot of thought, but not enough effort into it. He's a (his words, not mine) 13 year old. He doesn't have much freedom and I doubt he can do anything spectacular anytime soon. I know from first-hand experience that you can't do much at that age, plus this is his second attempt at making a series. The only impressive things I've seen are the masks, and that's only from the thumbnails. This is reliant only on a "tell, don't show" form of storytelling and it's not a good one. If I don't see improvement in the near future, I'm ditching this thing.

EDIT: Don't even fucking get me started on the gamejacking. I know for a fact he stole some things from Forbidden Knowledge and probably lots of other series. And he breaks character a lot in the comments. I'm sorry, but I don't see it getting better without someone helping him.

[DarkDragon]

I'll have to check out Forbidden Knowledge cause I didn't even realize he was gamejacking at all. I agree though at 13 there's not much you can really do. Took me till my early twenties to be able to show not just tell a good story on camera. Not to mention equipment and the skills to use that equipment take time to be fully acquired. Maybe with the other series crossing over it'll improve somewhat. I'm trying to remain optimistic I guess.