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[Halo 2] [Possible Spoilers]A Halo 2 Story Feat. ILB Chars
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[Halo 2] [Possible Spoilers]A Halo 2 Story Feat. ILB Chars

Alright everybody! Well, as disappointing as it was that none of our ILB stuff was featured in Halo 2, I've decided to write a story. The main character is NOT the chief, just a marine corporal. Twist is, the game will feature characters from ILB, AND I want to get some character information from you guys to have a character in the story, too.

Now, I have got a story planned down. Be warned though, it contains a lot of spoilers as to what happens to Halo 2. It follows the Halo 2 story to about half-way through the game, then cuts off on it's own. Before I go into the story, I have info on the Main character and his 'Sidekick' in a sense.

Daniel Gricks (AKA Dan)
Marine Corporal
DoB: 16th July 2523 (25 years old)
Born in Darwin, Australia.
Was a computer engineer before he became a marine.
2546 – Left Australia to train on Reach
2549 – Returned To Earth after achieving Corporal status on Reach
2550 – Moved from Australia to Canada
May 23rd, 2551 – Birth/Completion of the IPAI named Aurora.
August 31st, 2552 – Shipped onto the Orbital Defence Platform, Cairo
October 20th, 2552 – Goes to the award ceremony to honour survivors of Halo, Covenant attack Earth.

Aurora (AKA Arry)
Intelligent Programmed Artificial Intelligence (IPAI)
'Born' 23rd May, 2551
'Born' in Ontario, Canada.

Be forewarned, the plot basis is quite long, but has plenty of cool surprises.

The Story:
Spoiler (Rollover to View):
Short Version: We go from the ODP Cairo onto Earth, where we meet Jersey and Melissa who are fighting covenant for an Artifact which they came to Earth for. Dan and Aurora help Jersey and Melissa get the artifact before following the Covenant Capitol Ship to Halo 05. Jersey and Dan, accompanied by their AI's, go with the Sarge and a mass of Marines to the library where they fight through flood and covenant to retrieve the 'key to Halo'. Jersey and Dan are caught by covenant and locked up on the Covenant home world. They are then taken as hostages along with the Sargent back to Halo 05 to witness the beggining of what the covenant call the "Great Journey". The group break free with the help of an Elite who is called the Arbitor. The Sarge along with the Arbitor leave, and Jersey and Dan find themselves fighting alongside Elites, Grunts and Hunters against the Brutes, Jackals and Buggers. Working together, they take over a group of Phantoms, leaving one behind along with an Ultra Elite, and make a jump for Earth. I'll end this quick preview here, but the story won't end at that point.


Of course, the Artifact will play a huge part in the story, but I really don't want to spoil TOO much. Comments or ideas on what should happen are very welcome.

If you want to be a part of the story, e-mail me a character profile much like Dan's, but also include attitude and looks, or any other information you think is Important.
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PostPosted: Sun Nov 28, 2004 8:40 pm
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Okay, nobody seems to want to hear me out. No, my name is NOT Daniel Matthews, I only just had it pointed out to me that the initials were DM, so I changed his last name to Gricks-which sounds much cooler anyway.

I have got the first chapter complete, so if you want a good idea of what I can write like before you become a part of this, you can see below. If you DON'T want to know what happens in the beggining of Halo 2, I've got the summary of the story that is very, very short and doesn't have any spoilers.

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Following the adventures of a marine in his mid-twenties, Corporal Daniel Gricks finds himself sucked into an epic adventure against the Covenant for an artifact that could spell the destruction of all life in the galaxy. Written around the Halo 2 and ILoveBees storyline. Dedicated to my fellow Beekeepers and the PM's who gave me the inspiration to do this.


As for the first chapter...

Spoiler (Rollover to View):
Chapter 1
The Last Spartan


"In our top news story, John 117-a Spartan, part of Oni's secret weapons project and the last of his kind-returns to Earth a hero. We will have a live broadcast of the award ceremony ton-"

Daniel Gricks turned off the TV and shook his head as he straightened the bow-tie on his white uniform. He was a Marine Corporal, born in Australia and transferred for duty on the Orbital Defense Platform Cairo with the destruction of reach. He looked at himself in the mirror of his small living quarters he had on the station before brushing a hand over his short, spiky brown hair. Finally, he brushed off some dust and hair from the sleeves of the jacket, smoothed out the collar, and turned around to a small device sitting on his bed.

"What do you think" He asked, crossing his arms. The device made a beeping noise and a small blue holographic woman appeared above it, smiling softly.
"You look good in a suit. You should wear stuff like that more often." She replied. She was Aurora, an Intelligent Programmed Artificial Intelligence that Dan had designed himself. He was hoping that a big business or even the UNSC would want to buy the technology-it saved having to kill people and use their brains as templates, at least, if the rumors were true.

Dan rolled his eyes, "You know very well that I hate wearing suits. They're so… uncomfortable. There's so little room to move in them." Aurora just chuckled softly, but her composure soon changed as she raised an eyebrow.
"Why did you turn off the TV during the thing about the Master Chief?" She asked, crossing her own holographic arms. Dan turned back to the mirror and started to brush off his pants, "It's a bunch of baloney if you ask me. It's probably just a hell jumper with a high rank in green armor and special ops training on Reach." He replied as he finally finished straightening out his bow-tie for the second time.

Before Aurora could respond, Dan had turned back to her.
"What's the time?" He asked as he put a foot on the edge of the bed and fixed up his shoelaces.
"Four fifty-three." Aurora answered. Dan almost immediately tensed up, "Four fift… why the hell didn't you tell me what time it was?! We're going to be late!" He said as he grabbed the device and put it around his left wrist like a watch. Aurora disappeared back into the device as he rolled his sleeve over the top of it.
"You specifically told me not to bother you about what the time was, since I'm apparently always bothering you about being late." She retorted, seeming very serious for a moment before letting out a giggle.

"I didn't expect you to actually listen to me! Call up the elevator so I don't waste any more time!" Dan replied as he grabbed his formal white hat that went with the suit and put it on.
"One step ahead of you. Elevator is open and waiting, and a tram is on its way to pick us up." She said as Dan took off out the door of his living quarters, shutting the door behind him, before quickly taking off down the hallway leading to the elevator-which was open and waiting like Aurora said it would be. He got inside, hit the button to go to the floor with the tram, and the doors of the elevator slowly started to close and move downwards. He shook his head, "You're such a pain sometimes, and then you do things like this."

"Daniel, need I remind you that you designed my attitude and emotions off your very own?" She retorted, causing Dan to laugh softly.
"Yep, you're a pain all right…" Dan said as the elevator doors opened and a tram pulled up just outside them. He quickly ran to the tram and got inside, the doors shut behind him and the tram started moving. Dan then walked over to the glass doors of the tram on the opposite side he got in on. Outside the station was a beautiful view of Earth, along with hundreds of military craft.

"What's going on?" Dan asked curiously as a cruiser flew by the station, so close he could make out its registration.
"Not sure, ever since this big EMP blast on Earth that knocked out the whole chatter net the other day, the UNSC has been amassing its fleet. They even jumped in some craft from some of the remaining colonies. It looks as though they're prepar-" Before Aurora could finish, the whole station shook and the power flickered on and off. The tram came to an abrupt halt, almost throwing Dan off his feet. Red warning lights started spinning everywhere.
"What the hell was that?!" Dan asked as he got to his feet and straightened his hat.
"I don't… slip-space rupture blast, just off the Defence Grid… 13 Covenant cruisers, 2 assault carriers. They're launching boarding craft" Aurora replied, sounding very serious for once.
"They're here..."

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Very nice. Very nice. I enjoy the visual I get while reading it even though I know the story of Halo2, and when I read this I didn't base my visuals off of what Bungie created.

P.S. Just as an edit for you, you have this line here:

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He got inside, hit the button to go to the floor with the tram, and the doors of the elevator slowly started to close and move downwards.


You set up that he was taking the elevator to the tram earlier in the paragraph. This line just seemed...akward to me. Something to show his haste and impatience with the slowness of the elevator may add to the scene a bit more.
"He got into the elevator and impatiently mashed the descent button. As the doors finished closing he felt the slow, smooth movement of the elevator descending."

If I pissed you off by this, just say "Hey, a-hole, you wanna write it?" Wink

Good job so far though. Keep us updated.
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Eclipse wrote:
Very nice. Very nice. I enjoy the visual I get while reading it even though I know the story of Halo2, and when I read this I didn't base my visuals off of what Bungie created.

P.S. Just as an edit for you, you have this line here:

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He got inside, hit the button to go to the floor with the tram, and the doors of the elevator slowly started to close and move downwards.


You set up that he was taking the elevator to the tram earlier in the paragraph. This line just seemed...akward to me. Something to show his haste and impatience with the slowness of the elevator may add to the scene a bit more.
"He got into the elevator and impatiently mashed the descent button. As the doors finished closing he felt the slow, smooth movement of the elevator descending."

If I pissed you off by this, just say "Hey, a-hole, you wanna write it?" Wink

Good job so far though. Keep us updated.


No, thank you very much Eclipse! That is the sort of feedback I want to hear!

I was unsure of how much detail to put into the whole thing, because sometimes I can do whole paragraphs of just explaining what a room looks like. Of course, I won't do anything like that, but I will add little extra details in like what you mentioned. Thanks a bunch!

I got down the whole story so far. At least, a personal summary as to what is going to take place in the story. I've got at LEAST 5 characters from ILB as a character in Series One. After I couldn't decide where to end the story, I thought, what the hey, make it go on into a second series and then maybe even a third.

As to who will be in the story, Series 1 has Jersey, Melissa, Jan, Aunt Gladice and Gilly, along with the other 1.1's if you count them. However, given the way the plot unfolds, you could be seeing a few of ILB's 'bad guys', too... *hint hint*
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Well it's a bummer it's not really part of the Haloverse... but please continue and it'll be nice to see the story of the ILB crew continue. I'm still secretly hoping that the post Kali made is more true then she believes:
Kali wrote:
Maybe they scrapped the Earth-central storyline in order to allow time to put ILB content into the game. Yes, yes, that is it. We will see Durga and Jan etc. as well as portions of our conversations with melissa/sp in the game. They changed it all just for us!

Okay, maybe not.

I realise it's probably not the case but you never know... we might get lucky.

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Awsomness. I look forwards to seeing more of it!
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Man, I'm in the midst of writing a screenplay and a paper. I'll get back to you on this, but I'd really love to contribute some sentences. And maybe some music. Probably both.
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Just letting you all know that I am still alive, chapter 2 is almost finished. I'll be posting the story on a website I have planned for it, as well as in this topic and on FanFiction.net (yeah, it's as terrible as it sounds).

As for characters from people, Macavity and INCyr-I recieved your e-mails and you will be characters in the story, and you will be appearing in quite a few parts since you were the first two.

Also, people, please note that if you want you can be an AI, Elite, Grunt, or even Hunter character. Just, with the Hunter, you're not going to be saying much UNDERSTANDABLE stuff. At least, on human terms.
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Great beginning.. Im looking forward to seeing how it all turns out Smile
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so does this mean we kind of now have 2 major fictions in the works? the ILB rewrite Creepy and the continuation ... what's the name of your fiction? I don't think you ever gave one Razz I could link to yours at the end of mine to make one long story...
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I got the impression that it was a Halo 2 rewrite featuring some members of the cast of ILB, not an ILB rewrite. But what do I know...

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not an ilb rewrite, but a post-ilb fiction... I got the impression it was a halo 2 rewrite that followed post-ILB in a similar manner
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No, not an ILB re-write, continuing the story at the point it ends-when the Covenant turn up at Earth. It's neither a Halo 2 rewrite, nor an ILB rewrite, it is a story taking place in the same universe. If I were rewriting Halo 2, it would be following the chief

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But in this case, the main character is completely custom, and a lot of the other characters are from the ILB/Halo 2 universe. It takes place during Halo 2 and after ILB, but goes on it's own storyline-as in, not a mission to stop a halo being fired or the Covenant destroying Earth.

And Bruce, that'd be awesome. I'll link to yours, too, if you give me an address. Very Happy

Oh, and as for the name, it's Halo: The Lost Apiary. Wink
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I hope we get to see the *REAL* invasion of Earth in your story, you know, unless you get busy and stuff and decide to chop off the end Smile

Hehe.
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hehe like, "and as the Chief approached the last remaining Prophet with a furious, glaring anger blazing in his eyes, the Prophet slowly retreated, cowering in fear, knowing his end was nigh. His attempted retreat, however, was cut short because there was nowhere left to run. The chief raised the barrel of his shotgun. As the sinews in his fingers began their missiong to pull the trigger and end the covenant threat once and for all, a shape flew from the overhead buttress landing on the chief, catching him by surprise, simultaneously knocking the shotgun from his grasp. With such mysterious strength, the Chief's MJOLNIR helmet dented under the blow to the head he received. Finally catching up with the Chief, and appearing from the shadows seconds late, Dan ran desperately to the aid of Master Chief.

The end."

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