unforum

[G3K]

[META/PRESS] My ILB radio package - suggestions please!

[thunderclap8]

I just finished listening to that and boy, am I impressed! Very professional sounding and well organized.

I don't know if there's any good recorded quotes on this to flesh it out, but if you want to add more time you might consider mentioning some of the training exercizes, like the code relays and the system that grew up to support them.

[G3K]

[angelo]

Sounds excellent. I've listened to it a few times and really can't think of anything else you could add.

Tough to fully explain this game in such a short amount of time, but you definitely get the high points across pretty well...

[angelo]

Sounds excellent. I've listened to it a few times and really can't think of anything else you could add.

Tough to fully explain this game in such a short amount of time, but you definitely get the high points across pretty well...

[colin]

sounds good a couple thing i've thought of:
1) more on how the game was found, through the trailer and honey that was sent out.
2) tell people how to find out more about ARGs (possibly direct them to argn.com??)

[urthstripe]

Add some of the actual sound clips. You have time to add a particulalry harrowing one, or part of it.

You could talk about the end game, with the meetups and stuff.

[WhiteGulls]

Sounds wonderful! I can't think of anything else to say about it, and it works perfectly!

[IcyMidnight]

You could maybe add something along the lines of a very quick story overview.

Your first bit followed by
"One of the coolest things about the player's story is that it was affected and took twists in response to actions taken by the players. {Maybe include the phone chat bit about that here}
The story that is unlocked by the players takes place 400 {I forget...} years in the future as we see the lives of a number {you could put the exact number, I'm too lazy to count} of people come together and become entwined. Relations are built, tragedies happen, and events unfold into a truly compelling and emotional story."

You could do something like that, but better like the rest of the piece.

Good Luck!

Let us hear what you finally decide to do.

[Baelfael]

The wind up/wind down isn't explained. It's fantastic for us, who are used to listening to sound files with those at the beginning and end, but the uninitiated would probably just be confused, or ignore it.

Fantastic apart from that, though.

[WhiteGulls]

One other thing that you could do would be to add in the conflict between Mel and the SP, by changing the SP's quote to "Crewmember, what's my favorite vegtible?!" "Oh, I -KNOW-!", or whatever the making-fun-of-Mel quote was. Also, end it with a collage of the characters saying "They're here...", or the longer ending of Jersey with the revelations about the Flea, what they did, etc. Just trying to add a bit of length to it.

[vector]

I would add a bit more about the audio being and additional back story to the Halo universe. as well as writen by Sean Stewert, award winning author. Might help people to figure out why they would want to listen to it. Also i have found it helpfull to compare the audio to The War of The Worlds broadcast, people seem to understand what im talking about then.

[Ralen]

If one of your goals is to get other people interested, I would play a few more audio clips from the drama portion in a kind of movie-trailer style so that people's interest is piqued.

[hmrpita]

G3K, that is great. Unlike Baelfael, I do not think you need to explain the wind up/wind down. My feeling is that it doesn't even register on those unfamiliar with ILB. Radio pieces often use sound that is meaningful to some, but not to everyone. I think it is clever and you should leave it alone.

I had a person who is not a beekeeper listen to your piece and asked him for suggestions. He said pretty much what Ralen said, that adding something from the actual radio drama would be good. Something compelling that can stand alone. I leave the selection of the excerpt up to you.

[G3K]

Thanks so much for all your suggestions.