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gordon_ramsay
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The REAL Slenderman Book (Making it myself) Finally decided to make a thread, and see how long it took for people to scream "TRAILHEAD PLEASE!". If that is the case, then so be it, but I want to both get this out for people to see and to hear what people say about my writing.
Here It Is
I will be updating this story with a chapter every week, roughly ( I am, as we speak, working on the next chapter). So, what i want from YOU is just to read it, and tell me what you think of it. CONSTRUCTIVE criticism, if you please. I am probably setting myself up for a lot of flaming, but I can take it.
So, let me hear your questions, comments, concerns.
Posted: Sat Dec 19, 2009 3:08 am
Last edited by gordon_ramsay on Sat Dec 19, 2009 3:43 am; edited 1 time in total
Captain Viking
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Joined: 19 Nov 2009 Posts: 37
Spoiler: The text will be distorted
Posted: Sat Dec 19, 2009 3:12 am
gordon_ramsay
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Joined: 27 Sep 2009 Posts: 521
Captain Viking wrote:
Spoiler: The text will be distorted
LOL. when I first had the idea, I debated on making a chapter all binary, but then thought it would be stupid to have to make my readers decode a whole chapter.
Posted: Sat Dec 19, 2009 3:14 am
gordon_ramsay
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Joined: 27 Sep 2009 Posts: 521
Ok, first chapter is up. Also, I would like to apologize for the numbering on the chapters. they don;t give you an option of having a prologue and not giving it a number. So, when it says 2 Chapter 1, it is just chapter 1.
Posted: Sat Dec 19, 2009 3:35 am
Slender freak
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Joined: 17 Oct 2009 Posts: 368
gordon_ramsay wrote:
Ok, first chapter is up. Also, I would like to apologize for the numbering on the chapters. they don;t give you an option of having a prologue and not giving it a number. So, when it says 2 Chapter 1, it is just chapter 1.
so far so good so will you do the main story as one of the detectives and then have a back story through the womans POV(point of view) later on?
just asking
Posted: Sat Dec 19, 2009 4:26 am
gordon_ramsay
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Joined: 27 Sep 2009 Posts: 521
Slender freak wrote:
gordon_ramsay wrote:
Ok, first chapter is up. Also, I would like to apologize for the numbering on the chapters. they don;t give you an option of having a prologue and not giving it a number. So, when it says 2 Chapter 1, it is just chapter 1.
so far so good so will you do the main story as one of the detectives and then have a back story through the womans POV(point of view) later on?
just asking
As a magician never reveals his secrets, I can't reveal my intentions (it's a writer's superstition). However, I will neither confirm nor deny your question.
Posted: Sat Dec 19, 2009 7:16 pm
magicmaster50060
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Joined: 12 Dec 2009 Posts: 26
i want to read it but it isn't letting me gt to the 1st chapter
I'll check back on it later though maybe the site is having problems?
sounds like an interesting concept though
Posted: Sun Dec 20, 2009 12:39 pm
AshleySix
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Joined: 28 Nov 2009 Posts: 160 Location: Texas
magicmaster50060 wrote:
i want to read it but it isn't letting me gt to the 1st chapter :(
I'll check back on it later though maybe the site is having problems?
sounds like an interesting concept though
Same. D:
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Posted: Sun Dec 20, 2009 7:00 pm
gordon_ramsay
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It's not? hmm, let me check. You do have to give your name and location, but I won't make ya. just type something in.
Posted: Sun Dec 20, 2009 8:01 pm
AshleySix
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I dont even see where it says you have to do that. D':
Posted: Sun Dec 20, 2009 9:36 pm
DavFlamerock
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Gave it my name & location, but no luck on finding the first chapter.
Posted: Sun Dec 20, 2009 9:57 pm
gordon_ramsay
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Joined: 27 Sep 2009 Posts: 521
Ok, try it now. I unpublished and republished it.
EDIT: Alright, it is fixed, and should be up. i apologize for that. I am still getting used to blovelspot.
Posted: Sun Dec 20, 2009 11:07 pm
Chief Poirot
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Joined: 11 Nov 2009 Posts: 191
I'm liking it so far. Found a spelling error in the prologue: "Nessy's father loved her mother deeply, but once he hard the word baby, he was out the door and into divorce court.".
"Hard" should be "heard", correct? Can you edit in Blovel? First time even seeing the site.
Edit: "Disoriented, Vanessa's mother knocked the driver's sid door open and dashed for the back seat. " "Sid" should be "side", as well. But, other than those two things I loved the prologue. Now, time for bed. I'll read the rest tomorrow.
Posted: Mon Dec 21, 2009 1:26 am
gordon_ramsay
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Chief Poirot wrote:
I'm liking it so far. Found a spelling error in the prologue: "Nessy's father loved her mother deeply, but once he hard the word baby, he was out the door and into divorce court.".
"Hard" should be "heard", correct? Can you edit in Blovel? First time even seeing the site.
Edit: "Disoriented, Vanessa's mother knocked the driver's sid door open and dashed for the back seat. " "Sid" should be "side", as well. But, other than those two things I loved the prologue. Now, time for bed. I'll read the rest tomorrow.
Ah, thank you for finding those. I type so fast, I sometimes don't catch my mistakes. I will fix those momentarily.
Posted: Mon Dec 21, 2009 1:54 am
curiously high is lazy.
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If you need a beta to help you catch those errors prior to putting it up on there, I could help you out
Posted: Mon Dec 21, 2009 2:33 am
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