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TwoYellowDucks (Slenderman?) Blog
My friend and I started this blog, and we've been having some trouble getting it off the ground. At the moment, we haven't gotten very far into it, but we have a long projected span of possible content. For now, what we would like more than anything else is an audience with some constructive criticism to offer. We only have some vague ideas that can easily be restructured when we get to them, so feel free to remark on our acting and such.

http://www.youtube.com/user/TwoYellowDucks

PostPosted: Mon Dec 27, 2010 11:41 pm
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 		Be nice. They specifically asked for constructive criticism, and that wasn't constructive at all.

As for the constructive criticism, I'd say to work on your camerawork. It seems a little forced, and yeah, I know it's difficult to sound realistic and not have frequent pauses, but still, it's in your best interest to try.

And this is just my personal opinion, but black on black on tan is not conducive for easy viewing. Maybe lighten or diversify your colors a bit.

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