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[DEAD SERIES] Can We Hit Rewind?

**Posted:** Tue Mar 08, 2011 4:10 pm

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Cougar Draven

I'm having a hard time taking this one seriously. I'm three videos in, and I cannot concentrate on it at all. It's just not very well written.

I'll try to hack my way through it, but I'm not very hopeful.

**Posted:** Tue Mar 08, 2011 6:31 pm

Mr. Azare · Boot Joined: 31 Jan 2011 Posts: 51

The friend takes out her videos but she comments on them. She mentions "It was mostly static" and "footage from some old movie" and then "some words"... so, basically half the videos from TTA.

This is a perfect example of how a good advice con turn wrong. You have to give us some info on the characters so we can care for them, but you have to do it in an entertaining way. With this we have 7 videos about her and I really don't care. Give us some slender reason to care about the videos too.

Remember that MH had SM in their second video and it worked fine.

Also: The girl does deserve some attention. If I were her I'd prefer constant trolling over no one watching the videos.

**Posted:** Tue Mar 08, 2011 8:01 pm

Langerz · Boot Joined: 08 Feb 2011 Posts: 25

Her friend is posting videos but she doesn't give us a link?

**Posted:** Tue Mar 08, 2011 9:04 pm

CWHR? - Co-Creator · Guest

**Posted:** Tue Mar 08, 2011 9:08 pm

Mr. Azare · Boot Joined: 31 Jan 2011 Posts: 51

And BOOM goes my suspension of disbelief.

You should really avoid talking with your viewers when the whole medium is based on pretending everything is real.

And as far as I'm concerned you have taken too long to start the slender action. Imagine that you hit it big and in 3 or four months a new viewer wants to get into the show. He'll have to watch hours of nothing before getting to what he came for. That kills the possibility of new viewers.
MH had a SM in the second episode.
EMH had the fake one and small references since day 1.
TT had it since the second or third episode.
You have to rill the new audience while leaving a trial back that could interest new viewers.

**Posted:** Tue Mar 08, 2011 9:17 pm

CWHR? - Sabrina · Guest

**Posted:** Tue Mar 08, 2011 9:42 pm

CWHR? - Sabrina · Guest

And relax because this is it for me; I'm going to stop posting on here.

**Posted:** Tue Mar 08, 2011 9:44 pm

Mira · Unfettered Joined: 10 Aug 2010 Posts: 718

Hi Sabrina!

It's good that you guys seem to be pretty aware of the kinks you have to work out. I found the pacing a bit slow but again, that's something you seem to be aware of... I think it's kind of a lose-lose situation when it comes to introducing Slendy into a vlog because you will always have that dichotomy where some viewers will complain that it's too soon, while others will think it isn't soon enough (at least this is my experience). I suppose it's just something you'll have to feel out for yourselves.

I wish you guys good luck reworking everything, because I would really like to see a vlog series with female protagonists finally take off. You seem really nice and open to suggestion which means you are already ahead of the game, lol... just refrain from posting in this forum (doesn't matter if it isn't "in character", it's still immersion-breaking to have a PM around discussing their product) and you are good to go. We know now that you are working on it, so you won't have to reassert the fact in the future. :-]

**Posted:** Tue Mar 08, 2011 10:15 pm

MetalGearSamus · Unfettered Joined: 03 Apr 2010 Posts: 675

**Posted:** Tue Mar 08, 2011 11:28 pm

Mr. Azare · Boot Joined: 31 Jan 2011 Posts: 51

I don't know Mira. Would you really watch 10, 12 or 15 videos of sort of boring or completely boring story if you start something knowing it will be a slendervlog?
In the best of cases people would skip a lot of them, making them useless, and in the worst they will stop watching.

Imagine X-Files with half a season and no aliens or paranormal beings, just Mulder and Scully getting to know each other and hitting some clubs. Or 4 episodes of LOST without anything weird happening in the island. Or 2 episodes of Heroes without superpowers. Or 1 episode of 24 without terrorism and stupid characters.

People want to see a SlenderStory and one needs Slenderman. It's a common mistake to not present your characters, yes, but you need an equilibrium. The big three did it right. I don't want to insult the girls, but if they were going to rip so badly TTA they could have taken more important and universal things from MH.

Still, now I'm up to date (skipping at least half of each episode) and I'll follow them some more episodes to see how things turn out.

**Posted:** Tue Mar 08, 2011 11:39 pm

Mira · Unfettered Joined: 10 Aug 2010 Posts: 718

Good point Azare, as I definitely found myself wanting to skip videos in this particular instance (I may as well come clean, I didn't make it past the third video before I started trying to skip ahead).

I personally don't care how soon the Slenderman reveal comes, but there definitely needs to be SOMETHING aside from incessant monologuing going on to hold my interest... the "show" versus "tell" rule in writing also applies to video storytelling so far as I'm concerned. I really didn't need to watch a character mill around for six minutes outside in the dark reiterating how cold and "freaked out" she was when her house is right the fuck there. I would rather feel for myself that there are some strange goings-ons than be told secondhand that that's how I'm meant to be feeling.

**Posted:** Wed Mar 09, 2011 12:24 am

Cougar Draven

**Posted:** Wed Mar 09, 2011 3:37 pm

Punk V · Veteran Joined: 29 Nov 2010 Posts: 118

My friend and I were about to look this one over. Is there even a slondor sighting yet to anyone that has watched all of them?

**Posted:** Wed Mar 09, 2011 5:12 pm

Mr. Azare · Boot Joined: 31 Jan 2011 Posts: 51

I'm up to date. No slendersightings as far as I have seen. Weird dreams, although not that scary, and some video problems.

I really like the simbology in MLAnderson0's dreams.

**Posted:** Wed Mar 09, 2011 9:03 pm