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[perspicacious_loris]

[ABANDONED BLOG] Rusty Bike

[HunterEris]

TL;DR - I liked what I read but I have one issue that may just be my own perspective from personal experience.

It may just be me, but it feels like it's too well written. I know that sounds odd but hear me out.

To me, I don't really think of a 14 year old being able to write like that, which just kills my immersion a bit. I know that when I was 14 I wasn't able to write so clearly by hand when I was feeling rather emotional.

Whoever this "K" person is, sure. His first post has him seem like he could write like that. I'll say from the way he wrote he was late 20s or early 30s. The country drive thing made me think that as well as the general way he typed. Or he could be 23 like me and just type in a grammatically correct but still rather strange fashion.

Allison seems like she's at least 16-18 by the way she types. There's too much maturity coming through in the writing from a supposed 14 year old who is feeling all the feelings.

This is just my experience. Not saying this story is bad though, I do find it interesting. I know in the end I'm only seeing age in the writing from my own perspective and other people may not see this. I'll check in now and then since I am curious (even though I'm expecting her to be taken and now that K has the diary it's his turn).

[Gimme20dollaz]

Ew, Livejournal....

[fezstudios]

This is good but I don't see how this relates to Slendy in any way. *shrug*

[perspicacious_loris]

[JParadox]

This is the newest entry:

http://rustybike.livejournal.com/1860.html